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I got accepted into HelloPoetry.com! I am officially a poet on the internet!
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If you want to see some of my work, link here: https://hellopoetry.com/SupaDudz/ (Only my best posted there)
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I want to post exclusive poems here from my google doc onto this website on the Art forum? Would you guys care to read?

-From Dudz
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Congrats man! 

If if there’s any poem of yours you want to turn into a song let me know :) I’m a songwriter and musician in training and will give you full credit. 
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@David
Sure! I would be happy to do that one time!

I'll let you
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Take my blood oh frivolous rose,
As you lay on this cold, lone floor,
Most petals cracked, are falling down.
Feel me, empty my blood of veins,
Destructive bloom with beauty'n soul,
Bud show your beauty to my world,
Oh vain white rose with streaks of red.
So weep oh rose, your tears are blood,
frivolous rose, your tears I hold,
We'll be enjoined in soul and mind,
Until the end we'll both adhere,
Still sight of death in this cold year.

This is the most technical poem i've written in iambic tetrameter. What do you think? 


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Oh and yeah... i'd like to read your poems. I'm pretty good at giving advise too if that's something you would like. 
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@Vader
OMG. That is so wonderful :) Congrats, Supa!
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Thank you!!!!
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Your poem was very good not gonna lie.

I write free verse poetry. Whatever thoughts come to mind I write poems out of them. If you would like to see them ill send a link to google docs

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@Vader
That's a lot. I usually wrote free style too, but every once and awhile, wrote technical but those took a lot of thinking and time. Doing them in an extemporaneous way felt more creative to me. But i wrote dark to very dark poems. Those are the type i usually like. I'm an EAPoe type of poems fan. Stuff like this one i can remember:

Waiting through the creek,
slow, swamp like, dark
like the corner street with
no lights flickering.
 
I see shadows,faces,
desperate smiles with wolf
like teeth,slowly moving
along this calm water way,
blind to the end that awaits me.
 
I hear only one beat every inch
I move forward,my heart that
has forgotten the way through
this veil, the pearly gates that
await my smile,burnt skin,
and blood red eyes, i drift,  
this calm creek to my demise.

This is among the lighter ones too. Do you have darker stuff? 

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Some talk about issues like heartbreak, loss, dissapointment, and hatred. Nothing with demos.



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@Vader
Post a poem you think is darker... about loss or heartbreak. You can probably find it easier than i can. 

Edit; Actually hatred sounds pretty cool too if you can find it. 
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Love, oh love, where do I start
You mislead me, you abused me
You trick me into your devilish lies
You give me a false sense of hope
Because every time I talk I feel I am getting closer
But I am actually drifting farther apart
Driving a deep wedge from our love
Why do I bother trying
Why do I ever love
A plastic heart that contributes nothing
More manipulative than the best lawyer
Because when my hopes are high
They go sinking down the drain
I can’t give up the fight
When I need to give up the fight
Fight or flight, I just wanna fly away
This game is too insane
Everyday your obsessed with the same person
Your eyes glued when you want to unglue them
Go away love
Go away every lonely night
Crying into my pillow
Thinking obsessively about them
But they won’t answer
Every moment cherish
To make an impression
But impressions won’t be enough
You know they don’t care
Despite how hard you try to forget
But you are too determined
But you just need to forget about it all
Forget about them
But love attracts to you like a magnet
Every suction sticks
When I want it to unstick
What is it so attracting?
Why do I want to come back for more?
When I know I will failFall head first with no cushion
I try to go with the flow
Try to be myself
But nothing will work
Nothing will fit
The puzzle pieces won’t match
Go away love
Your worth nothing to me
You lied you cheated you played me
You used me as your punching bag
You use me as your test object
Too see how we will react
To the rejection
To the thought of failure
I am onto your dirty tricks
I know what you want to see is failure
Why do you want to see me fall
Why am I test subject
I am human too
I need love too
I don’t wanna dable and go
I desire the same affection
Yet my heart is the greatest liar
My heart is the greatest sinner
Everyday it tries to pull me in the wrong direction
Why do I have to suffer this force
I just need to let go
But I can’t let go
Everything falls down like a broken cliff
Thinking and shaking
Staring into your eyes
Awedropped
But knowing
That my goal is impossible
My standards set
And knowing I can’t meet those
When my heart tricks me I can
Is why I spend my nights
Looking at sad comics
Thinking I will be lonely forever
Mind manipulates me
Guess my mind is a sinner too
My whole body becomes Pinocchio
Lying that I can do this
That I can receive love
From someone that my heart connects too
But they don’t connect back
So I just wanna let go
“No don’t let go”
“There is always a chance”
“The odds may work out”
But they never work out
They always come back to haunt me
So let’s face reality
My love won’t love me back


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@Vader
Nice. I like how you didn't end it with any hope.. I favor those types of poems ;p
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@Outplayz
it depends how i am feeling really...thank you for the compliment

sometimes i give hope when it is too dark...sometimes its perfect with no hope