Sad Rap Song: by SupaDudz

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Notice: No I am not sad. It is a sample rap that I made off a sample beat

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I'm always so preoccupied in all my thoughts
And I've thinking so hard that I'm always starstruck
But I've been slipping down the wrong path lately
But I've been trying to get back on the right track baby
My mind is more cluttered than a 9 year old room
And that chick that used to sit right behind me in class
She was moved away like a negative force
I tried to do anything so I can get her attention
Tried some new jeans and cop a new pair
While the teacher be talking I always be daydreaming
So my perfect little grades that my parents boast
Starting to get rough around the common core
And everyday I go home and I cry to myself
Because I think I'm going to be a disappointment all of my life
A mistake that was never supposed to happen
So I drown out all my problems in this mobile device
Cause that's only safe haven that I got in this life
Man my anxiety is getting harder these days
But I never get tested cause my parents say it's a fake disorder
So all my thoughts thrown away like a disposal
And all this beef going around in my group
Is more cooked the a filet mignonette
Whatever that French word is
Cause the truth is that is what my parents wanted me to take
But I didn't want to because I liked Spanish
All the mistakes keep adding up
Until my whole mind is blown up
And this is so insane
Life is basically a chess game
And I never beat the core of the king 
So why go for the king
It is a cruel game with no regrets

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--> @SupaDudz
You seriously need to work on your flow and rhyme scheme, I literally rate this 0/10
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--> @SupaDudz
Do you genuinely like mumble rap?
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--> @RationalMadman
I genuinely don't think you know what the hell you are talking about. You obviously didn't rap it the right way because it is a mellow rap, not some hardcore Eminem hardcore emo shit you rap. It is supposed to give this sort of mumble ish vibe

Also no real rhyme scene. This is an off cuff verse