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    I got accepted into HelloPoetry.com! I am officially a poet on the internet!
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    If you want to see some of my work, link here: https://hellopoetry.com/SupaDudz/ (Only my best posted there)
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    I want to post exclusive poems here from my google doc onto this website on the Art forum? Would you guys care to read?

    -From Dudz
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    Congrats man! 

    If if there’s any poem of yours you want to turn into a song let me know :) I’m a songwriter and musician in training and will give you full credit. 
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    Sure! I would be happy to do that one time!

    I'll let you
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    Take my blood oh frivolous rose,
    As you lay on this cold, lone floor,
    Most petals cracked, are falling down.
    Feel me, empty my blood of veins,
    Destructive bloom with beauty'n soul,
    Bud show your beauty to my world,
    Oh vain white rose with streaks of red.
    So weep oh rose, your tears are blood,
    frivolous rose, your tears I hold,
    We'll be enjoined in soul and mind,
    Until the end we'll both adhere,
    Still sight of death in this cold year.

    This is the most technical poem i've written in iambic tetrameter. What do you think? 


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    Oh and yeah... i'd like to read your poems. I'm pretty good at giving advise too if that's something you would like. 
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    OMG. That is so wonderful :) Congrats, Supa!
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    Thank you!!!!
  • SupaDudz
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    Your poem was very good not gonna lie.

    I write free verse poetry. Whatever thoughts come to mind I write poems out of them. If you would like to see them ill send a link to google docs

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    That's a lot. I usually wrote free style too, but every once and awhile, wrote technical but those took a lot of thinking and time. Doing them in an extemporaneous way felt more creative to me. But i wrote dark to very dark poems. Those are the type i usually like. I'm an EAPoe type of poems fan. Stuff like this one i can remember:

    Waiting through the creek,
    slow, swamp like, dark
    like the corner street with
    no lights flickering.
     
    I see shadows,faces,
    desperate smiles with wolf
    like teeth,slowly moving
    along this calm water way,
    blind to the end that awaits me.
     
    I hear only one beat every inch
    I move forward,my heart that
    has forgotten the way through
    this veil, the pearly gates that
    await my smile,burnt skin,
    and blood red eyes, i drift,  
    this calm creek to my demise.

    This is among the lighter ones too. Do you have darker stuff? 

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    Some talk about issues like heartbreak, loss, dissapointment, and hatred. Nothing with demos.



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    Post a poem you think is darker... about loss or heartbreak. You can probably find it easier than i can. 

    Edit; Actually hatred sounds pretty cool too if you can find it. 
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    Love, oh love, where do I start
    You mislead me, you abused me
    You trick me into your devilish lies
    You give me a false sense of hope
    Because every time I talk I feel I am getting closer
    But I am actually drifting farther apart
    Driving a deep wedge from our love
    Why do I bother trying
    Why do I ever love
    A plastic heart that contributes nothing
    More manipulative than the best lawyer
    Because when my hopes are high
    They go sinking down the drain
    I can’t give up the fight
    When I need to give up the fight
    Fight or flight, I just wanna fly away
    This game is too insane
    Everyday your obsessed with the same person
    Your eyes glued when you want to unglue them
    Go away love
    Go away every lonely night
    Crying into my pillow
    Thinking obsessively about them
    But they won’t answer
    Every moment cherish
    To make an impression
    But impressions won’t be enough
    You know they don’t care
    Despite how hard you try to forget
    But you are too determined
    But you just need to forget about it all
    Forget about them
    But love attracts to you like a magnet
    Every suction sticks
    When I want it to unstick
    What is it so attracting?
    Why do I want to come back for more?
    When I know I will failFall head first with no cushion
    I try to go with the flow
    Try to be myself
    But nothing will work
    Nothing will fit
    The puzzle pieces won’t match
    Go away love
    Your worth nothing to me
    You lied you cheated you played me
    You used me as your punching bag
    You use me as your test object
    Too see how we will react
    To the rejection
    To the thought of failure
    I am onto your dirty tricks
    I know what you want to see is failure
    Why do you want to see me fall
    Why am I test subject
    I am human too
    I need love too
    I don’t wanna dable and go
    I desire the same affection
    Yet my heart is the greatest liar
    My heart is the greatest sinner
    Everyday it tries to pull me in the wrong direction
    Why do I have to suffer this force
    I just need to let go
    But I can’t let go
    Everything falls down like a broken cliff
    Thinking and shaking
    Staring into your eyes
    Awedropped
    But knowing
    That my goal is impossible
    My standards set
    And knowing I can’t meet those
    When my heart tricks me I can
    Is why I spend my nights
    Looking at sad comics
    Thinking I will be lonely forever
    Mind manipulates me
    Guess my mind is a sinner too
    My whole body becomes Pinocchio
    Lying that I can do this
    That I can receive love
    From someone that my heart connects too
    But they don’t connect back
    So I just wanna let go
    “No don’t let go”
    “There is always a chance”
    “The odds may work out”
    But they never work out
    They always come back to haunt me
    So let’s face reality
    My love won’t love me back


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    Nice. I like how you didn't end it with any hope.. I favor those types of poems ;p
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    it depends how i am feeling really...thank you for the compliment

    sometimes i give hope when it is too dark...sometimes its perfect with no hope