Took a stab at writing a haiku

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Calls is 2 syllables technically, so technically it is 5-7-6, which isn't a haiku. It's a common mistake
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Plurals typically have an added syllable 
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well fuck
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i ran it thru a syllable counter and it said it was 5 so idk 
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@skittlez09
Your haikus feel a lot like narratives than descriptions. It feels like your writing a son rather than writing a piece of poetry. Use an adjective to verb type scheme when you are writing.

Example

The green grass glistens in the luminous sky
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The grass glistened a green color in sky

One feels like an adjective, the other feels like a narration



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i ran it thru a syllable counter and it said it was 5 so idk 
Say it yourself. Never trust technology with that. Poetry needs to come from the heart, not from a computer
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@Vader
Say it yourself. Never trust technology with that. Poetry needs to come from the heart, not from a computer
I don't even know what a Haiku is, but I am pretty sure that "calls" is one single syllable unless you put it in Japanese, which will be 3. I mean, in human dictionaries written before modern technology appears, "calls" is still one syllable.
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I did not think you were asking sincerely because your question was very nearly haiku format- 5/6/5

What is a haiku?
Is it a form of poem?
I really don't know

The classic Japanese haiku has more formal requirements- a seasonal reference, a shift in perspective in the final line, imagism, etc

If I remember correctly, Ezra Pound popularized the form in English and I think of his "In a station of the Metro" as the template (although I think a traditionalist  would frown on adding a title with so much content)

In a Station of the Metro

The apparition
of these faces in the crowd:
Petals on a wet, black bough.

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No, that was intentional.
You sure it's not 7? I didn't realize there were additional requirements though.
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It depends, it really doesn't matter. I use it as one or two for poetry and explain it to my teacher
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Read some of my poetry if you seriously want to do poetry. I hate being narcissistic but I won my schools poetry competition, have had a publish poet rave about my poems, and have had many people moved by my poems 
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The Cold Blooded Killer
The smells of blood lures him into a trance
From miles he smells the agony of life
Where behold, the roots of evil has made place
Where everything he owned was taken
The man smells his tears from miles away
Eerily creeping around the site
As flashbacks occur from every angle he looks with his retina
The lost soul is trapped in a senseless killing
The lost soul acts out on prancing night crawlers
Luring them into his trap of agony and self torture
Every stab means every wound to his soul
But then the man stops
But his soul has been infected
He views the man from a mile out in the distance
Children in hand
The conscience has faded and his morals were vanishing
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thank you, but ill pass. 
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I like the new one a lot. You know I am not just trying to make you feel good either since I was so honest about not liking the first lol.
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Life

Words I hear often
"You make it seem so easy"
If they only knew...
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thanks bro 

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Like literally if you ask someone like me(who knows very very very little about poems),they all certainly will say that you gave a good try for the first one. Yeah it could have been more descriptive though. So you can always try and make it better. But I have to thank you bro because I didn't know and maybe would have never known about what a haiku was if it wasn't for you writing one. And as it is you always have Supa Dudz poems to fall back on. So best of luck.
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@skittlez09
Woah! The second one is quite good. But I don't get that syllable thing though. Well one thing can you write a cinquain? Like give it a try ,I like the format. Anyways great job!
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@Vader
Lol  cocaine on the road and falling from the skies... I just imagined it and I am cracking up so hard right now. But jokes apart,please tell me how do you manage to write such poems and that too at my age? You literary make me look and feel older.
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@Shamayita
Poetry is something that comes natural. My father has published various poem books, and I have a knit for writing poetry
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@Vader
Well my father is also a poet and has published many poems but still I find this whole concept too hard. Best of luck for your poem writing. I really like to read your stuff a lot.
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thanks g


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Sorry but what does g mean? I am not that smart you know,so if you could just explain.